Tuesday, March 9, 2010

Old man and the sea essay

Everyday we face obstacles that are harsh and difficult to overcome. These obstacles in your life may be as simple as having a hard time taking a test in school, or as difficult as facing a terminal disease. In cases such as that, there may be no way to get past that obstacle, and you cannot to anything in your power to push past it. But in most cases, these outside forces may seem difficult or even unstoppable at first, but it is our choices, and our actions that decide whether or not we overcome these obstacles.
An old man named Santiago faced various difficult obstacles in Ernest Hemmingway’s book “The Old Man and the Sea.” Santiago is a fisherman for a living, but faces poverty when he can’t catch single fish throughout several months. And when Santiago faces possible the biggest catch in his life, He is forced to push past seemingly hopeless situations. Some of these horrific obstacles are: he has to push through an injury, face dangerous conditions, and fight off predators that are coming after his catch.
One thing that harms his chances of catching this massive marlin is when he cuts his hands on the line. Although it wasn’t a bad wound, it still made it hard to work the line, since a fisherman’s hands are very important to him. “It is not bad,” He said. “And pain does not matter to a man.”(84) Although, Santiago chooses not to be pessimistic about this disdainful situation. Instead Santiago chooses to overcome this obstacle by working through the pain, and constantly telling himself that if he shows pain, than he is weak. He is absorbed in the though of catching this great fish. The old man is devoted, and pushed through this obstacle with determination.
Another powerful force that goes against the old man Santiago is the fact the Marlin he hooked continuously pulled him deeper and deeper into open water. This was dangerous to the man because this matter-of-fact, meant that it would take him a longer time for him to make it back to the island, and this meant the longer his catch would be exposed to scavengers.” I shouldn’t have gone so out so far, fish,” he said. “Neither for you nor for me. I’m sorry, fish.”(110) the old man only fully realizes this fretful factor on the way back after catching the fish. There was no chance of the man being able to catch the fish if he hadn’t held it as long as he did, so there was no real way of overcoming or going around this obstacle. Because of this factor he went through all the working and the struggling to lose it all in the end. This regretful obstacle could not have been avoided, Santiago was so devoted to catching the fish , he just figured the Marlin would wear itself out. And this factor initially leads to his downfall.
The final obstacle that Santiago has no control over is when the devious sharks follow the smell of blood to the Marlin he caught. “The shark was not an accident. He had come up from the deep down in the water as the dark cloud of blood had settled and dispersed in the mile deep sea.”(110) In the end, these conniving sharks devoured the large Marlin that he recently caught, no matter how much he fought against them. This situation could have ultimately been avoided if the fish hadn’t pulled his skiff out so far. So the sharks were also an obstacle that in the end are impossible to overcome. There is no way that Santiago could have fended off all those sharks in his current health and condition. So no matter how much he fought, there was no way he could save his prized catch.
Santiago although faced with many opposing forces throughout his battle to catch the fish, he attempted to push through them all with the utmost perserverence. He did this despite the fact that most of this obstacle were impossible to overcome. He didn't let this fact stop him. He worked through the pain of cutting his hand, he took the risk of going out deep with the fish, and he battled with the sharks to the best of his ability. He did this all just for the fact the he wouldn't let the fish overcome him, "Fish," he said softly, aloud, " I will stay with you until I am dead."(52) Everyone can take something from this story and that is, even when it seems you can't push past an obstacle, you can try as hard as you possibly can to go against all odds.

8 comments:

  1. 1. The essay's thesis is nothing. There is no thesis. Which is a problem.

    2. The essay's strongest quote is “The shark was not an accident. He had come up from the deep down in the water as the dark cloud of blood had settled and dispersed in the mile deep sea.”(110). It really explains the obstacle and situation well. It is also a very descriptive quote and says a lot.

    3. The Strongest part of the essay are the quotes, and the placement of them. it is very clear what she is trying to say/ the point she is trying to get across. The organization of them is good too, they are put well into the essay and make lots of sense since they are described beforehand,.

    4. The weakest part of the essay is the lack of thesis. It should be there, and it is a very major and important part of the essay to have one. Without one, then the reader doesn't know what the body paragraphs are going to be about.

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  3. 1.The essay's thesis is "Everyday we face obstacles that are difficult to overcome." This thesis is very concise. It wasn't too engaging but it could be with the right word choice.

    2. ” I shouldn’t have gone so out so far, fish,” he said. “Neither for you nor for me. I’m sorry, fish.” That is the best quote integrated into the story because it's well-detailed and it explains what you are talking about.

    3. I thought that your quotes were very good and very well placed into the essay. You really did pick the best and most relevant quotes.

    4. One thing that you could do is use a better vocabulary. Maybe if you use that sheet with the language of literary analysis.

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  4. 1. You do need to come up with a thesis to support your essay.
    2.The strongest quote in your essay is "I shouldn't have gone out so far, fish, he said. "Neither for you nor for me. I'm sorry, fish." This quote stands out to me because it shows hoe Santiago had compassion towards the fish. This quote really described his emotions and feelings.
    3.Your essay has god sentences that are full of information that makes your essay stand out.
    4. You do have a couple of errors her and there, and you are missing your thesis but you do have great quotes.

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  5. 1. The conflict is obviously about obstacles. At the same time, it also engages the reader with questions of relevance and interest. It shows it is focused by diving straight into the essay without looking back.
    2. Out of all the quotes, the best was the one sited on page 52. "Fish," he said softly, aloud, “I will stay with you until I am dead." This is an excellent quote because its intensity almost lunges off the page and penetrates the mind, awakening the same feelings of cold fear and determination that Santiago experiences throughout the story. You can feel the old man’s exact emotions as he swears his utmost fortitude in his fight with the great marlin.
    3. All in all, your best factors are your supporting details and examples. “This obstacle could not have been avoided; Santiago was so wrapped up in having such a good catch, he just figured the Marlin would wear itself out. And this factor initially leads to his downfall.” It is in phrases like this that define your writing style and commitment to the perfect word phrasing and tone.
    4. The weakest aspect of your essay appears to be the conclusion. Unfortunately, you wrap it up in a simple sentence or two, leaving the reader wanting more. Aside from this and a few grammatical and sentence structure errors, your essay is very well done.

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  6. 1. The thesis is that there are obstacles in life to overcome. People's decisions and actions decide whether or not people overcome those obstacles. I think that the thesis is engaging because it makes good points about obstacles.
    2. I like the quote about the shark. It explains the obstacle well and how the obstacle came into place. The quote is also explained very well in the paragraph, showing how this mistake could have been avoided.
    3. The supporting details in this essay are really good. The evidence backs up the analysis that the author made. "So no matter how much he fought, there was no way he could save his prized catch." I like this part of the essay because it shows just how big of an obstacle the sharks were.
    4. There are a few grammar and spelling mistakes but other than that the essay is really good. I can't tell if there are any literary terms in there, but if not they should be added. It would make the essay stronger and richer.

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  7. 1) there is no thesis so you need one to introduce your point of view to your first paragraph.

    2) "Fish," he said softly, aloud, " I will stay with you until I am dead."(52). This quote is the one that stands out to me because it shows his determination to catch this fish and his respect for the fish.

    3) The Strongest part of the essay are the quotes. They are placed appropriately into the essay and make sense.

    4)I think the essay is good but you could proofread it a few times for spelling and grammar. I can't tell if there are any literary terms in there, but if not they should be added.

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  8. The essay’s thesis is, even when you think you can’t continue, push through it because anyone can do anything as long as they work hard at it. The thesis is clear and concise. The thesis does engage me, because I know for a fact that if you push to overcome an obstacle, you will eventually overcome it. The quotes used in this essay were great, but the ones that stood out the most are the ones that describe the hardship Santiago is facing. The old man is such a great part of the story, so the quotes that are about are important to the story. The strong point of this essay would be great use of quotes, “Although it wasn’t a bad wound, it still made it hard to work the line, since a fisherman’s hands are very important to him. “It is not bad,” He said. “And pain does not matter to a man.”(84) Santiago overcomes this obstacle by working through the pain, and constantly telling himself that if he shows pain, than he is week. The old man pushed through this obstacle with determination.” I don’t think this essay has a weak point. Everything is covered and the detail are great.

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